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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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Online shopping has become part of our lifestyle. In these past couple of years, we have seen enormous growth from companies with a focus on online shopping
such
 as Amazon and Alibaba. The ongoing pandemic with mobility restriction
also
 amplifies the trend shift from brick and mortar to online shopping. There are pros and cons to the rising of online shopping, just like other disruptions in any other sector in history. The pros for
customers
 is the convenience of shopping. Online shopping offers access to a range of options within the customer's hand. After the goods have been purchased, they will be directly delivered to their home.
On the other hand
, the seller
also
 gains equal access to a wide range of
customers
 and
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 cost of setting up
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. Sellers do not need to worry about the store location to reach out the specific customer. It
also
 comes with some disadvantages.
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 of online shopping causes potential overspending that might not happen
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also
 worth noting that
customers
 become highly dependent on their phones, causing various well-being concerns. There are various survey showing the rise in screen time causes higher depression and anxiety. On the
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 side, we are seeing
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 increase in pressure to provide competitive prices to attract more
customers
. Sellers may be tempted to reduce
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 of production by choosing
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 quality
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products
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 that can cause various health
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 to the customer. In the end, every innovation comes with various benefits and risks. The
disaadvantage
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disadvantage
 of online shopping must not become the reason for us to reject the innovative ways of living. We need to embrace the benefit of
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 innovation while
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 our eyes open to the potential risks that it might bring.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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