Many people love driving their own cars others think that public transport is the only sensible way to travel around the city. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Most
people
who own a
car
like the freedom of driving and having the comfortability of their
car
. The other part of
people
who don't agree with
this
statement
however
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,
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prefer public
transport
as their form of transportation. In my
opinion
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people
should be encouraged to use public
transport
as it is
overally
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overall
good for the environment and causes less traffic.
Firstly
using public
transport
minimizes the amount of gas each
car
releases
in
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the atmosphere. Gases are basically carbon dioxide so when they are released from the cars they go up in the ozon surface of the earth causing
it
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holes. The
ozon
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ozone
surface is a protective shield around
earth
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the earth
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that protects it from the outside factors, in
this
case
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sun damage. The holes caused by gases result in the sun rays
to come
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raw in
the earths atmosphere
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the earth's atmosphere
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which are harmful
for
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the human skin but
also
cause global warming since once they come in,
its
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it's
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harder for them to escape.
In
addition
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using public
transport
lessens the
amount
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of cars used so less amount of gas.
Secondly
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public
transport
doesn't cause as much traffic as each person having their own
car
which means
less
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accidents. That's because a bus
for example
holds way more
people
than a
car
and is only the size of two of them.
Thirdly
if you had fun that night driving drunk
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is
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in
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not a good idea.
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public
transport
is far cheaper than paying for gas every 3 days. School buses
for example
have a 10 dollar
montly
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monthly
only
card which you can use whenever you want. In conclusion, public
transport
is better for a clean environment with
less
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fewer
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accidents and traffic and more money in your pockets.
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