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People today seem to be increasingly buying consumer goods such as the latest domestic appliances, clothes and electronic gadgets.Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, people
shows
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 a bigger interest in buying consumer
goods
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 as
the
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new domestic appliances, fashion clothes or electronic products. Buying new
things
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 is the fashion live style in
this
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 century, to satisfy the needs of
consumer
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, the
goods
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desighner
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designer
 are producing
lot’s
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 of different
things
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.
Sometime
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 if people enjoying to following the new fashion of clothes electronic gadgets style, they may get the
streeful
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stressful
 from their wallet.To have
lot’s
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 of new
things
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 to war or use it
doen’t
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doesn't
 means it’s useful for yourself, in fact, buying useful and comfortable
things
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 is much more
importants
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important
 than the pretty
outlooking
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out looking
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. But
in
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other hand
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another hand
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,
to
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getting
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 new
goods
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 from shopping has
it’s
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 positive reasons.
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, if you getting a beautiful dress from the new
fasion
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fashion
 you can wear it to share
the
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happiness with your friends, even share them with the new electronic products. It can become a new topic in your daily communication with your relatives or friend.
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,
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using the new
things
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 can increase your individual confidence,it could let your social ties more closely related and
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 it helps to
opening
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 your
eyesights
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. In
social
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the social
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 part, buying more and more
things
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 can support the GDP of your local government and encourage them to put more capital and attention on
develop
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developing
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 new
things
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. So in conclusion, people prefer to buying more and more various
fasion
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fashion
fusion
goods
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is
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in
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 a positive way, it
get
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 a lot benefits for themselves and
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 for the society.

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