Health experts claim that walking is the best exercise. However, people are walking less on a daily basis. What has made it happen and how to deal with this?

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It is argued that the best exercise is walking even though

people

rarely do that in their daily life. In my opinion,

people

tend to leave exercises because nowadays habits,

however

this

would become their daily activity if they have already felt its advantages.

First

and foremost, exercising becomes a necessary thing to do in order to keep our body healthy.

For example

, is walking. Walking become the best exercise because it is very easy to do. Some articles said that

people

should go on a walk at least 5000 steps a day to keep our physic healthy.

Nevertheless

, in reality,

people

are walking less on daily basis due to the modern lifestyle. Nowadays, everything can be done at home even without leaving our home at all.

In addition

, the improvement of our technology,

such

as mobile applications, makes

people

easier to go anywhere without walking.

For instance

, I have the Gojek application which is used to look for a ride every time I need to go to bustop even though it can be done with 10 minutes of walking which makes me less walking.

However

, walking can be our lifestyle in these several ways.

Firstly

, the governments should make nice pedestrian roads for us in order to attract us to walk.

Moreover

, the governments should make some events to provide

people

who want to walk together.

Last

but not least,

this

is a big chance for a software company to build an application which will be used to challenge

people

and they will get some gifts once they achieved the walking target. In conclusion, we can do walking as our exercise because it is so easy and

people

might make walking as their daily life if there is any support from the governments and technology.

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Health experts claim that walking is the best exercise. However, people are walking less on a daily basis. What has made it happen and how to deal with this?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people think that dangerous extreme sports such as rock climbing and sky-diving should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Some people think that big companies should provide sports and social facilities for the local community. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a trend of increasing amounts of consumer goods, which leads to environmental problems. What are the reasons for this trend? Give your own opinion and solutions.

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