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You are going away to travel for the summer. A friend will be looking after your house while you are away. Write a letter your friend. In your letter: Say where you are going Describe your house Explain some of the things your friend must do to look after your house •You should write at least 150 words. •You do NOT need to write your own address

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Hello John, I hope you are doing great. As you know
this
 summer I will go to Switzerland for three weeks. To be more specific I will stay in Geneva. Because of my plans, I have a big request for you. Can you look after my house during my absence? I know I am asking for much but it is very important for me. If you agree I promise I will buy you the best souvenir available in Switzerland. My house is very small, there is a kitchen bedroom, bathroom and living room. My precious flowers in the living room are crucial to me, it is very important to water them. In my house the air is very dry, so you have to do
this
 every day. I know it can be difficult but as I said, it's very important.
One
Correct your spelling
Once
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 again, I believe you will agree and to be honest you are my only and
last
 hope. I looking forward to getting some information from you and obviously seeing you as soon as possible. Best wishes.
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coherence and cohesion
Improve logical structure by ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic. For example, dedicate one paragraph to describing your house, another to explaining the tasks, and another for the closing.
task achievement
Try to avoid minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'One again' should be 'Once again' and 'I looking forward' should be 'I am looking forward'.
suitable writing tone
You have a friendly and appropriate tone throughout the letter, which suits the purpose of writing to a friend.
complete response
You have clearly elaborated on where you will be traveling and some specific tasks your friend needs to do. This makes your instructions clear.
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