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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion.

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Nowadays all are working professionals, in which majorly
people
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 are doing office jobs, sitting in front of workstations long continuous hours.
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 to take a break, every
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have
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variety
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a variety
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 of interest and passions which they would like to pursue. As all human beings are different, everyone's choice of activities and hobbies
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are also varied
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 vary.
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 of
people
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 find excitement in discovering things,
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instance
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 a lake hidden in the valley
some where
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 on a long drive. For some
people
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 doing new
things
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 all the time gives
adrenaline
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 rush. These
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kind
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 don't only restrict
in
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 new places, they love trying new cuisines as well.
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,Personally
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kind
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 of
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, I like new
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 to meet, something exotic food, drinks,
some place
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someplace
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 I have never been
too
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to
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.These
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 like exploring untouched and wild places. Change is the only constant thing for them.
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 shows the tendency of a
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 to adapt and
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 in
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the environment
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 easily. They are more confident when facing adverse situations in
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 lives, as
result
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 of exposure and being of adventurous nature.
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, all human beings are not
same
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, so we have
people
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 who cannot accept change easily.
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kind
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 likes
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their
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 comfort zone and
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 keep pursuing hobbies and activities in which they are more familiar. I feel the main reason behind
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, is they cannot risk trying new things, whether
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 food or a place.
These
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This kind
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kind
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 of
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 like to keep all affairs simple and low key. They don't want to tackle excitement and adventure. I am not saying, these are not passionate
people
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, but they are not open to the idea of something new,fresh. Everything should be
same
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,as the way it has been for them, constant, unchanged.
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 I feel
these
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this kind
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kind
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 of
persons
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 are quite reserved and calm. They like inner peace more than
adrenaline
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the adrenaline
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 rush. To summarize, everyone
have
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there
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 own choices. Few
likes
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like
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 to be in
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the there
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there
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their
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 familiar zone of food,places, activities, whereas for some only something new and fresh is acceptable and exciting. As I am a
person
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 who always tries something different, I like
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 outgoing and always discovering something attitude.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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