Nowadays people are trying to have a successful career and happy family life at the same time. What problems could this create? How can people overcome them? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your personal knowledge or experience.

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delighted family and
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their life a little bit troubling
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because two things can not be done meanwhile, so they should choose one In our
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life, people are so busy
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earning
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a big amount of money , and they do everything for achieving it ,but sometimes
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isolate them from their family
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and make some misunderstandings between their family , so some people are trying to do both of them equally, but it is not possible.
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, my mother worked a
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and tried to be close with us , but
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she was always tired and nervous, and there were problems in her
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, she could not progress not only in her
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in the family. In conclusion, if someone wants a successful
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or family, he or she should choose
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or later one ,
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both of them will be
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unuseful
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Balancing
  • Burnout
  • Juggling responsibilities
  • Neglecting
  • Unrealistic expectations
  • Dissatisfaction
  • Setting realistic goals
  • Priorities
  • Fulfillment
  • Effective time management
  • Allocation
  • Reducing stress
  • Seeking support
  • Coping mechanisms
  • Balanced life
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