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Internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand it also isolated us and discuss people not too socialized. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is undeniable that online communication is the order of the day, more and more
people
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 are going to social media platforms these days. Some
people
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 have reckoned that the
internet
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 helps to stay connected with their kith and kin and distance does not matter. But some intellectuals advocate
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 think discourage socializing among the common masses. As far as my views are concerned I fully agree with the given statement virtual interaction surged but the physical connection
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 be affected badly.
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 with, without telecommuting it is hard to touch with their loved ones,because of globalisation.
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 migrate to other countries to find a better future and more job opportunities and their family members are left behind. So in that situation
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 wireless technology work like a magic stick. A plethora of
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feels
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 connected with a family useful tool to feel claim when
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 isolated in their home, as well as business,business, run with advanced software and gadget to complete the work and
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 think work on the
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.
On the other hand
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, commoners and their a huge amount of
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 on their social accounts to chat with their relatives and friends, but they do not have much
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 to interact with them. And
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 thing is a reason of degradation of the society and
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 do not have
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 to meet physically. Because they express their thought and issue through the
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.
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, a long screen
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also
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 causes physical and mental ailments in public like weak eyesight, depression,
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 leaving a fake life on social media. It increase quells between family members,
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 start to live alone avoid
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 kind of situation In a nutshell, it can be reiterated that the
internet
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 has plenty of benefits but it
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 has drawbacks. It reduces the barriers between a different community, culture, and tradition. But it merges the gap between
people
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, who live nearby. So lawmakers and intellectual members of the society give attention to using the
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 wisely
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 it becomes a Nightmare for posterity.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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