Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

of all,
i
Change the capitalization
I

The pronoun I should always be capitalized.

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must say that health is one of the most important
issue
Change to a plural noun
issues

The singular countable noun issue follows the quantifier one, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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in our world.every country needs to
healty
Correct your spelling
healthy

If you don’t want healty to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

nation
Correct article usage
a nation

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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for progress and development. both governments and people
are have
Change the verb form
have

It appears that the form of the verb have does not work with are in this sentence.

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duties about it. the government must revisions on food product factories and agriculture
product
Fix the agreement mistake
products

It seems that product may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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. the people
shuolden
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should
shoulder

If you don’t want shuolden to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

,t forget
exercise
Add the particle
to exercise

It appears that the verb exercise should be in the to-infinitive form. Consider adding the word to.

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and
Correct your spelling
healthy
healty
Correct article usage
a healty

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diet.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health-conscious decisions
  • self-discipline
  • informed choices
  • personal accountability
  • regulating food industries
  • implementing policies
  • healthy eating
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies for healthy food
  • enabling environment
  • accessible
  • affordable
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