The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are, on the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialize. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience.
Although
online platforms such
as emails and websites have enhanced communication between persons, it has also
limited physical interactions amongst people
leading to loneliness. This
essay will argue in support of the statement by observing that the internet has made social interaction easier and simpler. However
, it has also
reduced the contact time
between humans by making people
to
spend more Change the verb form
apply
time
surfing the web.
On the one hand, people
have been known to link-up
with each other using different websites. Through email addresses, letters and relevant information are often transmitted across the globe from the comfort of our homes to Correct your spelling
link up
people
we never had seen. Consequently
, by these means
Add a comma
,means
people
make mutual friends
with others in faraway
Add an article
the faraway
country
even when they have never seen each other. Fix the agreement mistake
countries
For example
, two years ago I had the need for some information to help me carry out research. By searching the web, I came across an article of interest and I noted the author’s email address. When I contacted him, he assisted me so much so that we remained friends
till this
day.
On the other hand
, many people
have become addicted to visiting websites. They spend a lot of hours browsing the net to the extent that they have no time
left for socials. This
attitude ultimately cuts them off from friends
and family and eventually cause them loneliness. For example
, a friend of mine had depression last
month and on investigation
, I discovered that he has been staying awake all night long for about one week surfing the different sites of interest. He lost contact with some of his Add an article
the investigation
an investigation
friends
, became lonely and finally
low mood.
In conclusion, I agree that the world wide web remains a vital tool for communication and hooking up people
and that the downside of separating friends
due to longer screen time
could lead loneliness
.Change preposition
to loneliness
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