The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are, on the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialize. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience.

Although
online platforms
such
as emails and websites have enhanced communication between persons, it has
also
limited physical interactions amongst
people
leading to loneliness.
This
essay will argue in support of the statement by observing that the internet has made social interaction easier and simpler.
However
, it has
also
reduced the contact
time
between humans by making
people
to
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spend more
time
surfing the web. On the one hand,
people
have been known to
link-up
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with each other using different websites. Through email addresses, letters and relevant information are often transmitted across the globe from the comfort of our homes to
people
we never had seen.
Consequently
, by these
means
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people
make mutual
friends
with others in
faraway
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country
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even when they have never seen each other.
For example
, two years ago I had the need for some information to help me carry out research. By searching the web, I came across an article of interest and I noted the author’s email address. When I contacted him, he assisted me so much so that we remained
friends
till
this
day.
On the other hand
, many
people
have become addicted to visiting websites. They spend a lot of hours browsing the net to the extent that they have no
time
left for socials.
This
attitude ultimately cuts them off from
friends
and family and eventually cause them loneliness.
For example
, a friend of mine had depression
last
month and on
investigation
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, I discovered that he has been staying awake all night long for about one week surfing the different sites of interest. He lost contact with some of his
friends
, became lonely and
finally
low mood. In conclusion, I agree that the world wide web remains a vital tool for communication and hooking up
people
and that the downside of separating
friends
due to longer screen
time
could lead
loneliness
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