Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars and riding motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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fortunate enough to attend many memorable events with my family and friend and so I would like to talk about an
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which I organized . It was exactly 8 years back when I took the initiative to organize my
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wedding. At that point
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marriage alliance got fixed
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since my father was having a busy schedule with his work , I stepped in and offered help. Arranging an
event
requires a lot of time and effort and it is very crucial as it required you to decisions and
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to make the booking, I went around searching for the perfect venue, catering service, stage decoration and photography and
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from each party and got the budget approved from my father, I went to them and
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initial deposits to confirm my booking. And for the
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I
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I prepared the script
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days back and informed all the key family members , how the
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of
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. Above all what made me happy was to see my sister getting married off with her
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mate. Around the globe, people tend to make resolutions every new
year
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, buying a car etc and I am a person who tends to make resolutions every
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though I
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I have a more realistic plan and
that is
to relocate to another country. Australia to be more specific and so far I could say that I am successful in fulfilling my resolution. My
first
step was to secure a job in Melbourne which I did after three levels of interview and now the
next
step is to start my visa process. In order for that, I am in the process of arranging certain paper works like police certificate, IELTS certificate , qualification assessment . Once am done with the documentation and the visa application has been submitted, I will start the process to wind up from
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will arrange a small farewell party for my close friend .
Subsequently
, I would like to travel to my house town in India so that I could meet my parents and friends and spend some time with them before I move to Australia for good.
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