Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars and riding motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Around the globe, people tend to make resolutions every new
year
like starting a new diet, changing job,
buy
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a car etc and
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I am
a person who
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to make
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a resolution
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resolution
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every
year
thought
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I
dnt
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didn't
achieve most of those. Say
for
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instance, my
year
resolution was to diet and get fit and as you can see I couldn’t do it. But,
then
again for
this
year
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I have a more
realistics
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realistic
plan and
that is
to relocate to another country. Australia to be more specific and so far I could say that
Iam
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I am
I'm
successful in fulfilling my resolution. My
first
step was to secure a job in Melbourne which I did after three levels of interview and now the
next
step is to start my visa process.
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for that, I am in the process of arranging certain paper works like police certificate,
ielts
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certificate , qualification assessment . Once am done with the documentation and
visa
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the visa
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application has been submitted, I will start
process
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the process
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to wind up from
this
place like submitting
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my resignation
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to my current employer, selling off my car and household items .
subsequently
, I would like to travel to my house town in
india
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so that I could meet my parents and friends and spend some time with them before I move to Australia for good.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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