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in their advertising, business nowadays usually emphasis that their products are new in somw way. why is this? do you think it is positive or negative development?

#business #emphasis #products #somw #development
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The given bar graph indicates the
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 of residents’ fresh and instant café purchasing and having it out in 4
last
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 weeks in five
cities
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 (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane,
Adelaide
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, Hobart) in Australia. Overall, it is evident that people preferred to have
coffee
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 and tea out in all
cities
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, except in
Adelaide
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.
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, the
percentage
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people
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of people
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 buying instant
coffee
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 is higher than those who bought fresh
coffee
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. According to the chart, it is evident while the
percentage
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 of drinking tea and
coffee
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 in Sydney was about 61%,
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Melbourne’s was slightly higher at about 63%.
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, there was a close tendency to buy instant
coffee
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 between 42% to 48%, both
cities
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 showed less tendency for buying fresh
coffee
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 in Sydney and Melbourne which the per cents were around 44% and respectively.
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 remained
cities
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, the largest proportion belongs to drinking out in Hobart at 63%, which is followed by Brisbane at 56%,
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Adelaide
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, under 50 per cent.
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, a close similarity can be seen in the
percentage
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 of those buying fresh
coffee
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 in Brisbane and
Adelaide
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 at around 34%, while Hobart’s figure was slightly higher by the number of 38%.
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