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the plans below shows the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. ( Task 1, cam 16 test 3)

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The diagrams demonstrate the proposed change to the southwest airport in the following
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. It is clear that the principal change is the appearance of some new areas in the airfield. The number of boarding
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 and entrances to the airfield will be improved
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. Looking at the map of the airfield it is now, we can see that in the departure, the check-in desk is located at the left of the entrance and in front of the café. According to the planned development of departure, baggage drop-off will be built on the original check-in desk,
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, it will be moved to the opposite side of the new bag drop area. The café will be located
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 to the left of the entrance of departure. It appears that at present days the arrival has not any place but the new cafe, ATM, car hire area will be constructed in the right-hand
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. Especially, the site of the arrival will be expanded and the car hire space will stand there. A customer who wants to leave the location will be able to buy some products in the shops in the left hand after walking past the security
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. The number of entrances will be twice in the following
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 and the number of boarding
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 will
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 increase from eight to eighteen
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, the walkway will be replaced by a sky train system.
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