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Some people believe they should keep all the money they have earned andshold not pay tax to the state. Do you agree and disagree?

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Irrefutably in
this
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 contemporary epoch, people are working hard to earn a good living.
Nonetheless
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, many think that they should save all their earnings for themselves without paying their
taxes
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 to the
country
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. I strongly disagree with
this
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 rubric and
this
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 essay would shed light on the valid standpoints that why one should pay their
taxes
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 in the consequent paragraphs On one hand,
taxes
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 play a crucial role in a
country
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's economy. If someone avoids paying
taxes
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, the
government
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 confronts many problems relating to the services for their citizen.
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, most of the
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government related
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 sectors like public transportation, hospitals, schools, administration and construction of roads functions with the
taxes
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 which are obtained from their
citizens
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.
Thus
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 failing to pay
taxes
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 will greatly affect the growth of the
country
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.
However
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, the
taxes
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 are collected based on the wage scales in many countries. It is hard for the low waged individual to pay fixed or high
taxes
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, which is why most
of
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the
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people try to avoid submitting their
taxes
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. To exemplify, a survey
form
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from
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 a bestselling newspaper “The Hindu" stated that in India , only 50 % of the working
citizens
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 paid their
taxes
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, as there
was
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 no proper slab rates benefitting their
citizens
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 in 2019.
On the other hand
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, the
government
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 of each
country
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 should take responsibility to spend their citizen's
taxes
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 wisely and not
to
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misuse
it
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them
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.
Taxes
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 spent on public
benefit
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 will lure all the
citizens
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 to pay their
taxes
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 without fail.
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, in Canada, people pay their
taxes
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 regularly and in
return
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,return
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 they are provided with free education, medical and many other amenities by their
government
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.
Thus
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 resulting in the prosperity of their
country
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. In the final reckoning, I tend to reiterate my opinion that it is
a
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 duty of every working individual to pay their
taxes
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.
Although
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,
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 many try to avoid their
taxes
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 because of their dissatisfaction with their
government
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, they should be penalized for
such
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 acts. Yet there are other
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law-abiding
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law
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laws
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 abiding
citizens
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 who contribute and
creating
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 revenue for the betterment of their
country
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.
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