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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
Nowadays, females and males are
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 equal status. Coming to
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education, It is argued that
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Universities should register equal numbers of male and female
students
 in every domain. I don't think colleges should proceed in
this
 way. To accept
students
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 on the features of gender and subjects is the best way. It's obvious that male
students
 are normally much stronger than
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female
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 physically. To a certain
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, female
students
 can't handle heavy work not only in daily life but
also
 in their studies as
male
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 do. So, subjects
such
 as physical
excercise
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exercise
 and architecture, which require much more physical power and energy ,are accepting more male
students
.
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 related to house constructions are dedicated to men
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 the contrary, girls are doing better than boys in
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 way. Girls are really good at dealing with details because they prefer to observe people. They can figure out how people feel or what people need very soon,
then
 try their best to help them. That's why
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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