Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now one big traffic jam. how true do you think this statement is? what measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars

It is argued that the main cause of
traffic
jam
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in many cities in the world is due to the amount of
car
ownership
which has increased so fast during the past thirty years. In my view, I suppose to say it is certainly true because people tend to use their own transport to commute.
First
of all, the increasing amount of
car
ownership
was caused by the payment system that the dealers gave. The most favourite way to pay is annually payment per month. In Indonesia, someone who wants to buy a motorcycle or
car
just need to bring her identification card to process the instal payment, which is so easy.
Consequently
, the
traffic
jam
in Indonesia, especially in the capital city, Jakarta, is out of control.
However
, the government should take some actions to reduce
traffic
jam
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,
such
as increasing the tax for
car
ownership
and adding more public transportation. People will think twice when they want to buy a
car
, and
as a
result
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most of them would prefer to go somewhere by bus, commuter line, or any other public transportations due to the lower price. At the end of the time, the
traffic
jam
would gradually decrease. In conclusion, the big
traffic
jam
in many cities is caused by the rising
of
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car
ownership
. Even though the dealers offer
the
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affordable price, people obviously would re-think about
to have
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one if the government increase the tax and choose
using
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to use
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public transportation to commute.
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