IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

People in the past would always repair damaged products. However, nowadays, people like to throw out and purchase new products. What are the reasons for this? What problems might this cause?

In
this
Linking Words
 modern world,
people
Use synonyms
 dump any broken
product
Use synonyms
 and they buy a new
one
Use synonyms
 immediately.
However
Linking Words
, in the past years,individuals try to put together any damaged thing before considering purchasing a new
item
Use synonyms
.There are many factors that are associated with
this
Linking Words
 and the reasons will be elaborated on in the following passages.
To begin
Linking Words
 with, the most significant factor linked with repairing any improper
product
Use synonyms
 is the value of money.
People
Use synonyms
 in the past had a very good maturity to save money in any way possible, so whenever something happened to any of their objects, they tried their level best to fix it before giving a thought to buying another
one
Use synonyms
.
This
Linking Words
 is because
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 they never wanted to spend unnecessarily on any
product
Use synonyms
.
Additionally
Linking Words
, they were attached to their things in a way that they preferred to
repair
Use synonyms
 them on their own.
For example
Linking Words
, my grandfather has a radio
that is
Linking Words
 almost 50 years old ,it stopped several times and I advised him to get a new
one
Use synonyms
 ,but he always says no and keeps repairing it every time.The reason he explains
this
Linking Words
 is his emotions attached to the radio ,which is why he does not want to get rid of it.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, in
this
Linking Words
 modern era , no
one
Use synonyms
 cares about things ,they feel it is easier to buy a new
one
Use synonyms
,
instead
Linking Words
 of wasting time to
repair
Use synonyms
.Nowadays, only a minority of the population tries to
repair
Use synonyms
 any broken
item
Use synonyms
 .The main reason for
this
Linking Words
 is that they just do not want to spend time putting it together and order a new
item
Use synonyms
 right away.Another factor
that is
Linking Words
 associated with
people
Use synonyms
 throwing damaged products is advancement in products .It is seen that every
item
Use synonyms
 gets updated year after year.
For instance
Linking Words
, my computer crashed
one
Use synonyms
 day and I thought I should consider buying the latest laptop ,
instead
Linking Words
 of spending money
for
Change preposition
on
show examples
 its
repair
Use synonyms
 because there are many new features in current laptops as compared to previous computers. In conclusion,there is no denying the fact that ,nowadays
people
Use synonyms
 buy a new
product
Use synonyms
 ,rather than repairing the old
one
Use synonyms
 because of constantly updating of items.
However
Linking Words
, in the past
people
Use synonyms
 were more emotionally attached to their items,which is understandable.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: