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As well as making money, business also have social responsibilities. do you agree or disagree ?

#money #business #responsibilities
Fulfilling the social
responsibilities
 towards
society
 is the key to success for every
business
. Nowadays social
responsibilities
 are more important than making money. I totally agree with
this
 statement and I put forth
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my
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 some of the views in upcoming paragraphs. A
business
 will surely gain more profit and goodwill in the
market
 if they involve in doing some social
work
 in the
society
 as
this
 will create an image of
business
 or
company
 in the eyes of common people which helps in increasing demand of
company
products
 in the
market
. At present, only those businesses are successful which perform some social
work
.
For example
, TATA
company
 helps the poor people in the
society
 by giving them
products
 at special discounts and
also
 providing various job opportunities to them. Due to
this
, the
company
 makes their place in the hearts of people and increase their share in the
market
. The social
responsibilities
 which a
business
 have to perform are that they should provide eco-friendly
products
 to the
society
. The
products
 which are not harmful to our environment and living things. The government
also
 make some regulations to keep our surrounding areas neat and clean or use
products
 which do not create any hazard to our life and environment when we destroy or throw it after use.
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 was printed in 2022, in the newspaper "The Tribune" which provides information that more than 80% of businesses start using environment-friendly material in production and try to fulfil their social
responsibilities
 towards
the
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society
. The main motive of
business
 is to earn more and more money rather than concentrating on social
work
. They have to increase their sale by introducing new methods or
products
 in the
market
instead
 of focusing on social issues. Businesses perform all
work
 to gain an income which will be possible by providing the best and most innovative goods and services to the community.
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  • social responsibilities
  • contribute
  • well-being
  • community
  • philanthropy
  • sustainability
  • ethical
  • trust
  • reputation
  • accountable
  • profit-making
  • balance
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