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As well as making money, business also have social responsibilities. do you agree or disagree ?

#money #business #responsibilities
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Fulfilling the social
responsibilities
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 towards
society
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 is the key to success for every
business
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. Nowadays social
responsibilities
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 are more important than making money. I totally agree with
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my
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 some of the views in upcoming paragraphs. A
business
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 will surely gain more profit and goodwill in the
market
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 if they involve in doing some social
work
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 in the
society
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 as
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 will create an image of
business
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 or
company
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 in the eyes of common people which helps in increasing demand of
company
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products
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 in the
market
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. At present, only those businesses are successful which perform some social
work
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.
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, TATA
company
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 helps the poor people in the
society
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 by giving them
products
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 at special discounts and
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 providing various job opportunities to them. Due to
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, the
company
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 makes their place in the hearts of people and increase their share in the
market
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. The social
responsibilities
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 which a
business
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 have to perform are that they should provide eco-friendly
products
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 to the
society
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. The
products
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 which are not harmful to our environment and living things. The government
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 make some regulations to keep our surrounding areas neat and clean or use
products
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 which do not create any hazard to our life and environment when we destroy or throw it after use.
News
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 was printed in 2022, in the newspaper "The Tribune" which provides information that more than 80% of businesses start using environment-friendly material in production and try to fulfil their social
responsibilities
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 towards
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society
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. The main motive of
business
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 is to earn more and more money rather than concentrating on social
work
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. They have to increase their sale by introducing new methods or
products
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 in the
market
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instead
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 of focusing on social issues. Businesses perform all
work
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 to gain an income which will be possible by providing the best and most innovative goods and services to the community.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social responsibilities
  • contribute
  • well-being
  • community
  • philanthropy
  • sustainability
  • ethical
  • trust
  • reputation
  • accountable
  • profit-making
  • balance
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