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New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#technologies #lives #consumers
Modern devices and methods of purchasing and selling are changing the lives of people. In my opinion
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the era of faster solutions and
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 new system to buy and sell products,
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 us
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not to waste time by going to the shops and looking for what we need because we can do it easily through a click
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 our cellphone, laptop, iPad, so on. I agree with the statement because I think is a simple and comfortable way to make transactions nowadays. New technologies are, the most useful way ,especially for the new generations which habit is research everything on the internet and
therefore
 there are advertisements for all around the internet.
In addition
 to
this
 Amazon and eBay are the most popular platforms to buy and sell any product and they are the most known and reliable websites nowadays.
Moreover
 buying and selling through the internet generate more jobs in logistics, like warehouses, deliveries, and post offices which are the ones to make sure your product arrives to the
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. On the other ,hand many people
experiences
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 scams through websites
due to
 their items never arriving or they are completely different from what they expected and
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other another drawback is that the items could arrive broken
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which is necessary
send
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 back to the store and it will take more time to receive the item.
To sum
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to buy something it is important to make sure of the
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 of the website and check reviews to avoid scams and bad experiences, but
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advantages to
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 trend are wider than traditional shopping.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transforming
  • consumers
  • buying and selling
  • new technologies
  • revolutionized
  • consumer experience
  • e-commerce
  • convenience
  • range of options
  • mobile payment systems
  • transactions
  • challenges
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