Some local languages are becoming extinct. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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letter to inform you that I would not be able to attend the upcoming classes because of my health condition. I am passionate

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the course offered by your institute, as

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outstanding batsman I am sure

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enable me to get trained by good faculty and with

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team. Because my best friend who inspired me to join is already a member here and he is excelling in the game. The main reason behind

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is I have been diagnosed by Covid 19.

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doctor has suggested

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for a couple of weeks.

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is the main reason to discontinue the course in the consideration of others well being. And I will be obliged if you can make an exception in my case and provide

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repayment of my fees. As it can help me with my medical bill which I am intended to pay in

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difficult situation.Your immediate action in my case will be appreciated. I look forward to receiving your response.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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