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In the 20th century, contact between many different parts of the world has developed apidly through air travel and telecommunications. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is sometimes argued that increased contact and closer interrelationships between countries bring several benefits to
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society and thank goes to air travel and telecommunication for
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. Personally, I believe that there are
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 some negative effects of the above trend, as will now be explained. There are some downsides to increased commerce and increased relationships between nations in the world. The most significant of these disadvantages is that it can weaken national culture and traditions. The main reason is that people can easily adopt the aspects of strangers and more interesting lifestyles from foreign countries and usually neglect the traditional values.
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, a stand of Vietnamese folk songs might be gradually faded away because young Vietnamese people tend to opt for more attractive Korean music. The
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 disadvantage is that in the face of imported goods and services, local producers, especially in a less developed country, fail to compete with foreign ones in their own domestic market, which leads to a number of bankruptcies,
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 holds back society from development. There are some major points to make in favour of increased business and closer relationships worldwide.
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, it can drive the world's economy forward. Granted, big corporations
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 as Microsoft and Apple can easily expand their branches in any
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 of the world, thanks to increased business interaction, which can
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 create more employment opportunities, especially in a
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-world country.
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, revenues from tourist activities can contribute to
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economic growth. Undoubtedly, tourism jobs
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 as photographers and tour guides can help increase income for the locals.
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, the more we share habits, products and services, the better we understand each other, and
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 reduces prejudice against other nations. In conclusion, I believe that
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closer contact and increased commerce worldwide bring about both cons and pros and cheap air flights and mobile communication have accelerated that.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommunications
  • global economy
  • international trade
  • cultural homogenization
  • environmental impact
  • global warming
  • privacy concerns
  • digital divide
  • misinformation
  • rural communities
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