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students in school or university learn more from classes of teachers than other resources (e.g. Internet or TV), do you agree or disagree?

#students #school #university #classes #teachers #resources #e #g #internet #tv
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Learning is a part of human growth and development and people learn all through their life. Pupils should focus more on lectures than other materials
such
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 as television or the web. I strongly argue with
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 statement and
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personal
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 opinion in the end.
To begin
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, undergraduates shouldn't only learn from the classroom because their knowledge expansion will decrease. To explain
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, teachers only focus on the academic syllabus which consists only of theory
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, a child can learn it in a more interesting way from other areas like commercials,
youtube
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YouTube
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 and educational resources online.
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, if a student wants to know about
newton's
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 law of physics
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 the classroom, they can learn it practically from videos available all over the internet. So
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, students shouldn't restrict themselves to learning and growing from different aspects.
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, less concentration on studies in large groups is another reason for not stopping scholars
to study
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from studying
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 outside the campus through different sources. To explain, focusing on studies in a class is difficult as some pupils hesitate
in asking
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to ask
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 questions or
clearing
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 doubts even if they haven't understood the lecture.
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, recent research has shown that 70% of school-going children study for their examinations from educational material present all over the internet rather than revising from their educator's notes.
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, opening various areas to grasp knowledge will enhance students' schooling In conclusion, Despite, all the advantages school have for children some people
finds
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find
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 it boring and find other interesting ways to learn specifically apps and online
tuitions
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tuition
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. I completely disagree with the fact, that restricting students from extra resources other than classes of teacher will be a good option.
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, it will expand their knowledge and the education will be fun.
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