Some people think that developing a successful career is more important than spending time with family and friends while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,there is an ongoing debate on
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-life balance. While some people devote their entire life pursuing their profession, others, prefer to spend time with
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ones. It can be argued that those who commit to their
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, do so out of the desire to make money, a standpoint I totally agree with.
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, workers who put kids
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, I believe, could be because they want to be part of their
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development. On the one hand, being fun of one's family can be due to a
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bond.
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, some employees choose to spend more time with children away from
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, with the aim of helping in their upbringing. As credible as
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might be, it often comes with a price to the workplace: low output.
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research had shown that when the staff of an organization spend more time away from
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, it usually
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the fortunes of the company negatively. On the flip side, some
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like being workaholics, because it helps them to make more money which is used in providing for the family.
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is very common in firms that pay their workforce on
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basis.
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set of professionals always
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accomplished by delivering on the mandates of their employers as well as helping them to
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their set target. Eventually, these outfits will only promote those who were dedicated to service delivery.
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, a friend of mine
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recently enjoyed rapid promotion with
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compensation package in his workplace following his dutifulness. In
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, it is indeed nice to be
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with our
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emotional development, despite our official duties.
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, I believe it's more rewarding to be
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committed
to our
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for monetary gain and job satisfaction which is what we were recruited for.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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