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More and more people are choosing to eat healthy food and making time to exercise regularly. Why and what can we do to encourage this ?

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In recent
day
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, eating clean food and doing exercises frequently is becoming the main lifestyle of both the elders
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 and younger
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. With various
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benefits, I totally agree with
people
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 following
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 kind of life.
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, I will
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analyse
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 and answer the question about why and what we can do to hearten
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 of all, choosing to eat healthy food can help us to enhance our physical health in different ways. If you want to lose weight, keep fit and
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 a longer life expectancy, eating organic food combines with having a plan for every meal is always an optimal solution and the shortest way to your aim. Aside from having a healthy diet, spending time on exercises regularly is
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 a good way to develop
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medical health.
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, from many interviews,
people
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 said that it was
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 a productive method to pure their spirit and help them to work more
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efficiency
 with positive energy In order to increase the number of consumers and create a
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 life, agencies and companies can advertise good products and
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 more
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 for citizens. The advertisement impacts directly on their mindset and
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 them
to
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orient to a proper way.
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,
people
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 intend to spend their time
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exercising in
place
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 containing
pure
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 atmosphere. By erecting more parks, the government can not only decline the air pollution but
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 can encourage their residents to take part in outdoor activities In conclusion, having a healthy diet and doing exercises is one of the best ways to help
people
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 grow up from inside and outside. The benefits from that are enormous and it is becoming
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 that
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 on the earth lead to
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