Health experts claim that walking is the best exercise. However, people are walking less on a daily basis. What has made it happen and how to deal with this?

Everyone knows that to have a good quality of life, we need to maintain our physical and mental
health
. Physical
health
can do in some aspects
such
as take care of our meals, have enough time to sleep, and
concistence
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consistency
consistence
to do
exercise
. Even though we understand that concept, in
fact
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most
of
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people
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the people
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can't
paracticing
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practising
it well. Their busy daily activity made them
ignoring
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the good and bad things to their body. One of them is
exercise
.
Although
the easiest and the best
exercise
is walking,
but
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many
people
less to do it
in
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their
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daily basis. Concentrating to finish their
works
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,
have
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some deadlines
in
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the same time, or laziness
are
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some reasons why doing
an
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exercise
is quite difficult for some
people
. But in the pandemic era like today, all the
people
finally
realize that
health
is the most expensive
things
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. Even if we have many resources (money, power, or position), we can do nothing while we infected
a
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virus. Like blessing in disguised,
this
perspective
make
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people
voluntary spend their 1 or 2 hours
do
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some
exercise
in their daily activity. It's started with light
exercise
like gym, running, or cycling.
Moreover
, they made some
sport
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clubs to support and maintain their spirit on doing
exercise
. In line with the physical aspect,
keep
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our mental
health
is important
also
. Some
people
can do
in
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various activities
such
as praying, meditation, or have some "me time" to refresh their mind and keep the positive vibes. With
this
effort,
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we can feel how to be a real
human
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who
capable
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are capable
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to appreciate every blessing in our
live
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, especially
health
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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