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‘Everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity.’ How far do you share this viewpoint?

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There is an idea that
people
 should permanently allocate a fixed amount of their earnings to
charity
. It seems to me that being obliged to take part in supporting the charities will negatively affect. And I will explain the reasons in
this
 essay.
Firstly
,
people
 generally prefer contributing
in
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 donating organizations (
charity
) voluntarily.
Therefore
 when
people
 are forced to donate a part of their income consistently, they gradually might become unsatisfied with supporting the
charity
 and
also
this
 lead to
decrease
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the
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in the
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voluntarily
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 affairs in society. A
second
 disadvantage is
the
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a
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 financial condition. By
this
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,this
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i
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I
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 mean that
in
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on
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 some
occasion’s
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occasions
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people
 has to invest their money based on
the
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apply
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futuristic programs, so they might need more money than
daily
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their daily
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 routine.
Furthermore
,
people
 might encounter several problems,
for
example
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 sickness, unexpected events,
and
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apply
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retirement and
aging
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.
This
 affects their financial planning in a way that they have to spend unwillingly. The
last
 factor is
unstable
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the unstable
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 economic condition that exists in some countries. Meaning that
by
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increasing
rate
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the rate
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 of living cost
as a result
 of inflation followed by unemployment, decrease
purchasing
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the purchasing
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 power of
people
. So they are not able to afford their own
live
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 properly.
Although
 most
people
 are contented to help others,
but
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they should be able to make a decision freely. It is true that there are some positive points in donating a fixed amount to
charity
 by everybody permanently; the charities would have stable revenue by receiving money consistently every month so they would be able to make a plan to help needy
people
 considerably. Despite
this
, it seems that it would cause a significant unsatisfactory sense among
people
 in humanitarian affairs. To conclude, the problems of financial affairs of
people
 during
live
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life
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, declining health, unexpected events and economic instability combine together make obliged paying to
charity
 unpleasant.
However
, all
people
 are not
sopposing
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opposing
supposing
 to
this
 matter but it appears to be the case very frequently.
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