You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Worker often have to retire at the age of 60 or 65. However, some people say that they should be allowed to continue working for as long as they want. What is your opinion about this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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countries, people can retire when they reach 60 to 65 years old. Some of them may be happy to move on to the new page of
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, yet some may be reluctant to stop working at that age. In my opinion, I support the idea that
elders
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should stay in
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work
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field as long as they wish to. One of the reasons is that
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is not enough to support their
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. When one is older than 60 years old, there is a good chance that their salary already reached a higher level.
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, they are used to the lifestyle with better payments.
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, having a vacation at a hotel, eating at a fine-dining restaurant, and travelling around the world can all be their ideal ways to spend money. The
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amount
they receive from the government after retiring is simply too little to afford their
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.
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, I think old people should continue staying in the business if they still have the ability and the willingness to do so. Remaining
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employed
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provides a sense of achievement and prevents depression among the
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. Getting old makes humans feel like becoming burdens to
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society.
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, without a proper plan for
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retirement, many can get bored during all
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leisure time and start getting depressed. In some extreme cases, some
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need to ask for
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from their children and feel ashamed or useless.
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, staying at a company and contributing to business milestones can be satisfying.
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, giving
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to younger workers, investing
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startups, or achieving tasks at
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can all put older employees' experience to use.
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, the chance of getting upset is less by feeling a meaning of
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at
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. To sum up, I believe
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should stay in the corporates as long as they want to. In
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way, they can receive payments to support their expenses and feel less depressed through gaining rewarding feelings at
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retirement age
  • prolonged employment
  • skills gap
  • inclusive workplace
  • youth employment opportunities
  • health concerns
  • continuous training
  • personal autonomy
  • financial readiness
  • pension systems
  • demographic changes
  • labor market
  • intergenerational knowledge transfer
  • mentorship programs
  • workplace adaptations
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