a friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. he/she has asked for your advice. write a letter to your friend.  in your letter  explain why your think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday. describe some possible disadvantages. say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer.

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hello Jimena I'm writing to you regarding the
mentioned
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camping trip that you're planning to do
the
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next summer. first
at
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of

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all, don't forget to grab your suncream,
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in summer is really strong,
in
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addition
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addition,

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planty
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of water is
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when you are doing outdoor activities, so take always a drinking bottle with you and a hut will be
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recommended

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as well.
definetely
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it will be an amazing experience, you will
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lot
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of time in contact with
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nature and
exercising
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, which is very
desstresfull
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stressful

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for people like us
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hardly stay in natural
envirolments
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environments
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.  I was already looking for
camping
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a camping

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destination, I found a
must go
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place, it is located
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on

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Gold
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the Gold

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Coast. Despite
of
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all the good things, it has a few disadvantages,
such
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as
no
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not

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having
bathroom
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for taking a shower
for instance
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, or
kitchen
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a kitchen

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for cooking, so be prepared. can't wait
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see you. lots of love. Gonzalo.
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greeting and closing
Consider a more formal structured opening, for example: 'Dear Jimena, I hope this letter finds you well.'
single idea per paragraph
Try to organize your paragraphs more clearly with one main idea per paragraph to improve the overall flow.
coherence and cohesion
There are some minor spelling mistakes, for example: 'planty' should be 'plenty,' and 'desstresfull' should be 'de-stressful.' A quick proofread will help.
suitable writing tone
The writing tone is conversational and friendly, which is suitable for a letter to a friend.
complete response
You have addressed each point of the task prompt: the enjoyment of the camping trip, possible disadvantages, and your willingness to join the trip.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • serenity
  • outdoors
  • refreshing
  • hustle and bustle
  • inherent
  • foster
  • distractions
  • cost-effective
  • unpredictable
  • wildlife
  • adequate preparation
  • physical demands
  • researching
  • campsite
  • lasting memories
  • mutual interests
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