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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
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this
 job due to a vast range of reasons. The most important reason is that I love caring for children because they are completely funny.
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, I have two years of experience in a nursery school as a teacher,
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 is reading and I would like to spend a part of my free time on reading novels. I look forward to receiving your response. Yours faithfully Shahram Amiri
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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