The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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retail apocalypse
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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Too much emphasis is given for education of the young. More government money should be spent to free time activity of young people. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Technology is becoming progressively universal. In the fullness of time, classroom teachers will be totally substituted for technology. Do you agree or disagree?”

At present times, the population of some countries include a relative number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantage outweigh the disadvantages?

Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Nowadays you can find instructional videos for just about any crime you can think of. What possible effects can this have on individuals and society? Provide specific reasons and examples to support your answer.