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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of the most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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In
this
 modern scenario,all age groups of people enjoy their existence regardless of generations,but here,some individuals believe that adolescent
life
 is the best as they do not have any responsibilities.
In contrast
,others claim that adults have
better
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life
.
Although
 they have to take care of their family,they lead luxurious
life
 because they have the ability to reside without depending on their families.But,according to me,both stages
are play
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 an indispensable role in the globe.
This
 essay will discuss both
these
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 statements. To embark on,to
considering
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about
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the youth
life
.
Firstly
,they are free from their tensions because of no stress regarding the work-related issues in their
life
.
Consequently
,they can have
good
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healthy-lifestyle
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healthy lifestyle
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.
Secondly
,
although
 sometimes their behaviour is not proper in terms of lacking respect towards the older people,parents use to tolerate them
instead
 of punishing them.
Moreover
,they get more affection from their households.
for instance
,as a matter of fact,mothers and fathers are always supporting their youngsters even though they made a mistake which is called affection. On another hand,adults have a great opportunity to look after their families by earning more income which is useful for feeding them.
for example
,parents do not have the ability to do
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job
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 at their stage because of health problems.
Furthermore
,maturity
life
 can purchase anything
what
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they
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 want without asking anyone.
Additionally
,they get more freedom from their families. To conclude,every part of
generation
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 is very imperative in everyone's
life
,so everyone
try
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 to enjoy each and every moment whether it is
good
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a good
the good
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 or bad moment as
life
 is not possible without the ups and downs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adolescence
  • fulfillment
  • responsibilities
  • exploration
  • long-term goals
  • sense of stability
  • carefree
  • contentment
  • well-being
  • life stage
  • unique opportunities
  • deep satisfaction
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