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With the increase in computer use, many people feel that schools do not need to put the emphasis that they used to on basic handwriting skills or mental mathematics skills.

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In recent years, computer
use
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 around the
world
 has increased drastically.
As a result
 technological
equipment
 is used increasingly in schools around the
world
. Many people question
therefore
 whether schools should put much emphasis on teaching students basic handwriting
skills
 and mental mathematics
skills
. The
use
 of technological
equipment
 in lessons has increased since the onset of the digital age. Nearly all professions around the
world
 involve computer
use
 and even the simplest tasks are carried out via electronic
equipment
.
Hence
, it is important for students to learn how to
use
 technology correctly for their future careers. Electronic devices
also
 offer various learning advantages, as notes and assignments can be completed much faster and more neatly using these tools.
Nonetheless
,
the
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practical
skills
such
 as using and holding a pen correctly are
likewise
 vital for future careers. For that reason, students have to be taught at early ages how to carry out simple tasks using basic
skills
,
such
 as writing. It is
also
 essential that a
student
 develops neat handwriting, as in the case of a technological problem the
student
 will have to write by hand.
Furthermore
, final exams are typically written by hand and
thus
 the
student
 must develop the basic skill of holding a pen and writing with it. Mathematics
skills
 are no different. People will not always have a device with them to carry out calculations and the ability to do arithmetic in the head is a vital skill for operating in today’s
world
. In conclusion, I personally believe that schools should keep a balance between using practical
skills
 and using electronic
equipment
 to carry out certain tasks by having
student
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students
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 submit assignments created electronically, yet
also
 by having them complete assignments by hand in class and without computers or calculators.
This
 balance is important
,
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 as if the focus lies only on one of the two aspects, the
student
 will face problems later on in life.
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