Some educationalists think that international exchange visits will benefit teenegars at the school. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

A few teachers believe that
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interchange visits
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useful for
youth
at the school. I strongly agree with the idea that there are a lot of advantages of international exchange visits for
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but there might be
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exceptions. On the one hand, ı would like to say something about advantages.
Firstly
, it could provide students with an
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opportunity
to study in a different
country
.
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Furthermore
, ıt could
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, history and culture of another
country
.
Secondly
, meeting new friends to enrich their personal development.
Thirdly
, it is effective to
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to develop a global perspective. İn addition, it may increase the
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understanding and
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tolerance
of the other cultures. As well as
teenegars
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teenagers
reveal their language skills.
Finally
,
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horizon can be broadened with
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interchange
travels.
On the other hand
, there are some exceptions. If
youth
people travel to undeveloped countries, they might suffer unwanted incidents.
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they can convict of fraud.so they could
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their money. Some
youth
might be prejudiced because they do not like the
country
that they go to.
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when ı was a high school, a friend of mine went to Germany. He did not like
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culture , so he never loves that
country
. To conclude, ı agree to a great extent that intercontinental exchange programmes are very useful to utilize
youth
people at the school.
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