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Some people suggest that young people should take a job for a few years between school and university. Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this

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There is an argument about the idea that youngsters would benefit from part-
time
 occupation during the
time
 between secondary education and university. in
this
 essay, I will explain about advantages and disadvantages of
this
 argument and give my own point of view. With regards to the benefits,
firstly
 it helps people at young ages know the value of money and understands the favour of their parents did for providing family all the
time
 and appreciate them.
Secondly
, it makes them be prepared for living on their own since they can obtain partial financial independence. After that, it may help them about getting to know which kind of job they want to take in their future life so they can choose their major with the experience they gain.
On the other hand
, because during
this
time
 they're usually students and mostly aren't expert in any job there is only a narrow range of basic jobs they can do.
For instance
, as a waiter/waitress, food delivery, etc so they don't earn much money and it
also
 faces them with
time
 limitations for their social activities like hanging out with their friends which can lead to mental health issues. At the same
time
, it can
also
 have a
deteriorate
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 effect on their education since they'd be out of
time
 and tired makes them fall behind with their studies and affect their future life. All in all, for students who work before
get
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 to higher educations if they'd be able to manage their
time
, I think the benefits are outweighing the downsides far more.
Submitted by Amir Fakoori on

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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