The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in2010. ( cam 13 test 1)

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in2010. (  cam 13 test 1)
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The diagrams demonstrate the layout of the entrance to a city hospital in 2007 and 3 years later.
It is clear that
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the principal change is the development of transport infrastructure. The addition of a car park and the construction of a
bus
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station accompanied the improvement of the traffic system at the entrance of the hospital. Looking at the map it is in 2010, we can see that there are two roundabouts located at the intersections of the hospital carriageway with the city road and ring road. Two ways to go to the
bus
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station were constructed to link to the roundabouts. In 2007, six
bus
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stops were located along the two sides of the hospital carriageway,
however
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, they were replaced by a
bus
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station
in
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the west of the hospital road. By 2010, a new car park for residents was built in the east of the city hospital,
therefore
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, the original parking only was for the staff
instead
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of both
as
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the
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past.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bus with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • located
  • situated
  • layout
  • infrastructure
  • facility
  • public transport
  • bus route
  • roundabout
  • intersection
  • development
  • modification
  • enhancement
  • access
  • comparison
  • previously
  • subsequently
  • provide access to
  • implement
  • upgrade
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