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The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In
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 modern ,society many
women
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 work to support their family because of which most of them are not able to properly take care of their
children
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 due to which many crimes are arising particularly in the
children
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.In my,opinion I partially agree with the statement.I will expound my viewpoint in the following paragraphs.
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,many
women
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 are ambitious in their life and work,most of them work harder than their male counterparts.In regard to
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women
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 forget to look after their
children
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 to meet the expenses of today's needs.
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,in the initial stage of the child's ,growth he/she needs a mother to look after them and to require proper nourishment due to the lack of not taking care and not paying attention towards their
children
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 leed them to crime.
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,many big cities are prone to most juvenile delinquency because of both working parents.
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,it is not the sole responsibility of the
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 the male can
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 look after their little ones and help them to learn differentiation between right and wrong which help them to know good and bad and stay away from criminology.
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,if both are not able to take care of the infant they should ask
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 favour to their grandparents,not the crutches which most parents prefer nowadays.At
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 early ,stage they need someone from the family to stay with them so that they do not involve in any unlawful activity. In conclusion,it is a dire situation one should not take
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 lightly and it is not only the responsibility of one partner it should be articulate efforts by both the partner and should try to find the better solution for the
children
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 so that they did not suffer in the near future

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evolution
  • domestic roles
  • diverse professional engagements
  • dual-working parents
  • family dynamics
  • juvenile delinquency
  • societal and economic factors
  • dual-income households
  • childcare methods
  • community support systems
  • gender roles
  • family responsibilities
  • professional aspirations
  • development needs
  • correlation
  • simplistic causation
  • workplace policies
  • flexible hours
  • parental leave
  • gender equality
  • role models
  • successful womanhood
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