Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinions?
Some
people
believe that music
helps to bring people
together from different countries, different customs, and different eras. I personally agree with this
view for several reasons.
First
of all, music
is an efficient way of bringing people
who have different
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a different
background
together is Fix the agreement mistake
backgrounds
that
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because
music
is known as a global language. As a result
, people
from all around the world can enjoy the same music
through the melody even though they do not really understand the meaning of the lyric
. Fix the agreement mistake
lyrics
For instance
, K-Pop song
are extremely popular Fix the agreement mistake
songs
to
many nations while Change preposition
in
Korean
language Change the article
the Korean
is not widely use
globally. Through Change the verb form
is not widely used
music
people
forget about all the barrier
, they become Fix the agreement mistake
barriers
same
and one when they Correct article usage
the same
at
the concerts of famous singers and in clubs.
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In addition
, music
is an art form which is enjoyed by all, and this
helps reduce the generation and age gaps among people
. Some music
is eternal, regardless of age, people
are able to enjoy the same melody, rhythm, or share the same memories through the song. For instance
, the
classical piano Correct article usage
apply
musics
from Change the wording
music
kinds of music
pieces of music
Bethoveen
and Mozart eraCorrect your spelling
Beethoven
are still widely use
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are still widely used
are still widely using
for
children and adult who learn to play classical Change preposition
by
music
. This
kind of music
do
not have Change the verb form
does
expire
date. Another example, when Change the form of the verb
expired
national
anthem is played, children, adults, and elders could recall the time when they had Add an article
the national
flag
ceremony in their schools
In conclusion, Correct article usage
a flag
music
as
a universally accepted art form, which enriches our lives and strengthens the connections between us regardless of our background, culture, and age.Correct your spelling
is
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite