Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give our
It is believed that recently
people
have become more approachable due to distinct technologies whereas other part
think that modern devices are damaging social skills. As for me, with Change the wording
parts
inventions
of smartphones and distinct applications, social interactions have come in a fresh way which improves our status in society and makes us more sociable. Correct article usage
the inventions
Although
it has a negative side as well which also
be discussed in the following paragraphs.
First
of all, it is vital to point out that when new technology was developed people
were getting used to it by discovering core
in using it and different applications. As an illustration, originally the purpose of social media was to meet and message Correct article usage
the core
to
a potential friend even if it was a stranger. Change preposition
apply
This
assisted to advance communicating
with native Replace the word
communication
people
which then
resulted
perfect social skills in real life. By talking or messaging, human Add the preposition
inresulted
fromresulted
being
tend to better understand the atmosphere of the conversation and how to keep Fix the agreement mistake
beings
this
conversation up as a result
people
were acting more sociable.
On the other hand
, people
are becoming more addictive
to new technologies. Replace the word
addicted
Moreover
, it can be applied to applications that keeps
Change the verb form
keep
people
engaged with their phones or laptops. This
kind of Correct your spelling
lifestyle
life-style
causes them to turn into anti-sociable Correct your spelling
lifestyle
individual
. Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
For instance
, in Japan
there is a term Add a comma
,Japan
such
as Hikikomori which is corresponded for
those Change preposition
to
part
of society that Fix the agreement mistake
parts
are
allocating their time Change the verb form
is
on
sitting in front of personal computers or smartphones. Usually, they are locked inside their room without going outside which decreases human interactions and as a rule makes them lonely.
In conclusion, as I mentioned before, it goes without saying that technical things have given us dozens of opportunities to be more sociable. Change preposition
to
However
, it is recommended to avoid detrimental influence
Fix the agreement mistake
influences
such
as addiction in order to not lose connection with reality.Submitted by Allazhar on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?