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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion.

#people #places #visit #food #attitudes
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humanity
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 behaviours, exploring
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new activities always helps to feel enjoyment. Numerous
people
 can be innovative in their opinions by experiencing new
things
 just like visiting various areas and
try
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 to eat unfamiliar meals while
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 others have a tendency of staying on
things
 that they have already known. On the one hand, there are two main reasons why supporters of the latter view consider so. The primary one is that some take care more and more about their health, and they tend to not try unfamiliar recipes which they have not tried so far. They opine that inexperienced meals will have a negative effect on their healthy diet. In fact, recent research investigated by European scientists showed that more than 70% of consumers ordered the same food repeatedly around the globe.
Moreover
, they may feel unsafe if they reside
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visit
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the visit
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 to
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 place where they are not familiar
with
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. Due to the fact that
,
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 it may take ages for individuals to adapt or accommodate.
On the other hand
, other
people
 including me , think that experimenting with new meals and visiting
to
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new areas can be
main
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 impulse of creating
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interest to be happy and discover more. By visiting different regions,
people
 can explore more
things
, they can know about the culture of countries and even it is always
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 chance of improving social skills and understanding
people
's
behaviors
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.
Additionally
, trying to eat dissimilar foods can help to adopt the food habits of other nations.
For instance
, a person who has to continue his career in
other country
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another country
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he
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must
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adapt
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adopt
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national
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 dishes, in these kinds of
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 adjustable attitude can help. In conclusion,
plethora
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a plethora
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 of
people
try
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 to experience new
things
,
tasting
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 new foods or visit new regions while some feel insecure
in
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 these occasions. Even so, I feel that trying to unfamiliar
things
 in life not only helps to social but
also
 it can help change enormously
people
's life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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