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The climograph illustrates the information of average monthly
temperature
 and
precipitation
 in Kolkata city over the year. As an overview, the most noticeable is the highest
temperature
is occurred
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 in May. Meanwhile,
precipitation
 is reached its peak in the middle of the year which is July. The least amount of both
temperature
 and rainfall is able to see in January and December. Regarding the details, in terms of
temperature
, there are around 20
degrees
 at the beginning of the year before a slight increase to 25
degrees
 in February.
Consequently
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 rise to the hottest season in May which is approximately 30
degrees
. After that, the
temperature
 dramatically drops to 25
degrees
 again in November.
Lastly
, falling to around 20
degrees
 in December. According to rainfall, it can be obviously seen the
precipitation
 is less than 50
mm
 in the
first
 4 months,
then
 increase to 100
mm
 in May. The dramatic growth presents in June which much more than 250
mm
 and reach
to
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a peak in July around 340
mm
. The data of rainfall
is considerably fall
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 to 150
mm
 in October and rarely amount of
precipitation
 in December.
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