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The climograph illustrates the information of average monthly
temperature
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 and
precipitation
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 in Kolkata city over the year. As an overview, the most noticeable is the highest
temperature
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is occurred
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occurs
occurred
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 in May. Meanwhile,
precipitation
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 is reached its peak in the middle of the year which is July. The least amount of both
temperature
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 and rainfall is able to see in January and December. Regarding the details, in terms of
temperature
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, there are around 20
degrees
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 at the beginning of the year before a slight increase to 25
degrees
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 in February.
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Consequently
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 rise to the hottest season in May which is approximately 30
degrees
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. After that, the
temperature
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 dramatically drops to 25
degrees
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 again in November.
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, falling to around 20
degrees
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 in December. According to rainfall, it can be obviously seen the
precipitation
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 is less than 50
mm
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 in the
first
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 4 months,
then
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 increase to 100
mm
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 in May. The dramatic growth presents in June which much more than 250
mm
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 and reach
to
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apply
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a peak in July around 340
mm
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. The data of rainfall
is considerably fall
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is considerably falling
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 to 150
mm
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 in October and rarely amount of
precipitation
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 in December.
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