In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Renting a

house

is not a choice for some people as they are more likely to purchase a

house

. In order to invest their money rather than wasting it on

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temporary accommodation. I personally believe that it

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positive case due to the privacy that

house

owners will have

besides

the freedom in their choices. To

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with, it is essential for some

countries

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citizen

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to live

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their property rather than renting a place to stay. The reason behind

this

is to invest their money in their mortgages since the

house

will be added to their wealth what’s more properties value increase over years which makes buying a

house

a good opportunity to start

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investment. In my point of view, owning a

house

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positive

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impact on people as they will have more privacy because they will live alone and in their

house

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total flexibility in their decisions so they do not need to take

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approval from the estate owner.

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, In my country, renters

are prohibit

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not only to renovate the

house

or furniture but

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to have pets inside the

house

so they do not have the freedom they want to

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inside their

house

which almost everyone

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annoying. To conclude, individuals are buying houses

instead

of renting one to invest their wealth. In my opinion,

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owing

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house

is better than

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rent to live because of the privacy and freedom the owner will get by living in his property.

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ownership
renting
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sense of security
stability
financial investment
asset
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belonging
community
potential
future generations
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