Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, many
people
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choose to save money more than healthy for consuming food and drink
products
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. So
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affect their
health
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problems in the future.
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, Healthy
products
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are more expensive than normally other
products
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. A reason to support my idea will be outlined in the following paragraph. In many stores,
people
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can find easily
products
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of food and drink in the store which have many alternative brands for choosing,
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,
people
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can find Coke which is the most popular drink in the world in various stores and frozen food which is convenient for eating.
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, these are sugary
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which
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cause
people
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to
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health
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problems
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as obesity and diabetes which are cumulative
effect
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are
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not good for their
health
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in the long term.
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, the government will face a big crisis in the future for the population. So the solution for
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problem is giving information which is learning healthy to
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.
On the other hand
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, healthy
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are more expensive than sugary
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or normally other
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thus
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a process of separation between sugar and other ingredients will make a lot of cost for producing
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orange juice 100% in Thailand is priced at around 30-35 Baht while other orange juices not only a less proportion but
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which add any ingredient are priced at around 10-20 Baht where they can buy easily in every store. In conclusion,
people
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pay attention to healthy less than saving money as they want to collect money to use in the future regardless of
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and benefit for consuming healthy
products
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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