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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, many
people
 choose to save money more than healthy for consuming food and drink
products
. So
this
 affect their
health
 problems in the future.
In addition
, Healthy
products
 are more expensive than normally other
products
. A reason to support my idea will be outlined in the following paragraph. In many stores,
people
 can find easily
products
 of food and drink in the store which have many alternative brands for choosing,
for instance
,
people
 can find Coke which is the most popular drink in the world in various stores and frozen food which is convenient for eating.
As a result
, these are sugary
products
which
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that
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 cause
people
to
Change preposition
apply
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health
 problems
such
 as obesity and diabetes which are cumulative
effect
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effects
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 and It
are
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is
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 not good for their
health
 in the long term.
Moreover
, the government will face a big crisis in the future for the population. So the solution for
this
 problem is giving information which is learning healthy to
people
.
On the other hand
, healthy
products
 are more expensive than sugary
products
 or normally other
products
thus
 a process of separation between sugar and other ingredients will make a lot of cost for producing
for example
 orange juice 100% in Thailand is priced at around 30-35 Baht while other orange juices not only a less proportion but
also
 which add any ingredient are priced at around 10-20 Baht where they can buy easily in every store. In conclusion,
people
 pay attention to healthy less than saving money as they want to collect money to use in the future regardless of
health
 and benefit for consuming healthy
products
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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