Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people, while others believe they don`t. Discuss both these points of views and give your own opinion.

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says that professional sports players can be proper

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for young

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, which is partially

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with my opinion, whereas, the rest of

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have a completely different idea. Presently,

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have an impact on

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's lives, especially on younger Society. For

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purpose sportsmen and sportswomen attempt to show suitable behaviour because their manners have been seen all over the world.

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, they attain enormous money for their performance;

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people

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believe that if young

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have ambition for success, professional

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are great

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for them.

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, others think professional sports players irrespective of massive salary cannot be perfect

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, because of some significant reasons;

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, if you look at former professional

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' careers, obviously discover that some of them had unsuccessful lives, only due to popularity job occasion, the public thinking is, they are good

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, Diego Maradona has been one of the best ever football players in the world has not had a nice personal life, in fact, he was addicted to drugs.

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from my point of view if young

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choose correct person For Themselves to achieve their goals, do not mind select professional

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or other

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for

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modelling.

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, these

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definitely had arduous moments to accomplish high-level positions. So there is not any guarantee for young

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who can tolerate these difficulties and might be harmful to them. In conclusion, professional

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cannot play good

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for all

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, because I think in some situations they themselves did not have great lives.

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, even they are good ones, might young

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cannot deal with difficult circumstances as extent as professional

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