Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people What the possible causes of this trend, and what solutions would be effective reducing crime.

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Crime cases committed by youngsters are driving up around the world. I believe there are two main factors that cause
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and some possible ways we can adopt. Perhaps the major cause associated with
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is exposure to
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in the family. It is believed that family and domestic
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have profound adverse consequences on children’s mental and emotional
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UNICEF’s report,
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or crime experienced at a young age could lead to
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in later life.
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, involvement in criminal activities could be explained by economic reasons
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as poverty and unemployment. In developing countries, there are a large number of young people who suffer from poor standard of living and substantially low
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of salary. As a result, crimes
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as pickpocketing, shoplifting,
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might be the profitable short-term
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left for them. Turning to possible solutions,
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that are designed to support
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exposed young people.
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, founding a victim helping
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that provides emotional and legal
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for youths at high risk of
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, reducing poverty through employment seems reasonable.
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to the creation of jobs, a productive workforce appears to be crucial, so building educated workers could break the poverty cycle.
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, youth crime is a complex socio-economic problem so
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the solution will require a comprehensive response by the state, the institutions and the individuals.
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