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A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas. What problems can this cause? How might these problems be reduced?

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Nowadays urbanization in the cities is rising and rising because more and more crowd are moving to the centre and it can open to the many ways to increase their career way and so that they move to the city but it is
also
 important to know that the countryside too important in the system of the republic and I try to explain it in my essay.
Firstly
 of all,it can be problematic to the government if all folk in the republic move to the city because the oversupplying population can destroy infrastructure and purity of state, for ,instance the production may not be enough for population factories just may not be on time to produce the product for residents and it may be problems with the meal because there are too many populations. The solution to
this
 problem is that we should make modern and modern surroundings because more and more communities are moving to the cities ,for
this
 reason, we should make all terms for the society which live there and it is important to pay attention to the countryside. From a neutral field of view moving to the centre can rise up the level of perspectives in increasing prospects across industries and global rankings
such
 as in education, industry and so on. But we should not forget about landscape as industries that can develop in a landscape is
also
 important in our lives and in the system of the state. In ,
the
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conclusion we should do everything to make the nation feel comfortable in the countryside.
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