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Students should pay their full university fees as they benefit from having university studies and not the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#students #university #fees #benefit #studies #society
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 that
,
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 student
have
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 to pay their university fees
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own
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their own
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 because after all he or she is the one who
have
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 benefits of higher studies, not whole
saciety
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society
.
However
, I
largly
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largely
 disagree with
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 statement as
society
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a society
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 have serval advantages of
haveing
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having
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 eduction.
This
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this
tople
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people
 and
also
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reason
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 in upcoming paragraph. To
commance
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 with, A person with their eductions is going to be professional
in
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 sector. Hundreds of educational people play
a
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development
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the development
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 of
community
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 as well as
country
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the country
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. Due to
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competition
completion
competion
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the competion
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 of university education among the children, the
eductional
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educational
 level is increasing day by day in public and
that is
 the one major aim of any nation's
outhority
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authority
.
Additionally
, after
competeting
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completing
competing
higher
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in higher
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 education students are working as
a
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professionals in
sociaaty
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society
such
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as teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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,
doctor
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doctors
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,
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a lawyer
the lawyer
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lawyer
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lawyers
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 who are the main people of
safe
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a safe
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 and healthy community.
Moreover
, There are serval middle and lower class families in every country who can not
affort
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afford
 high
eduction
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education
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 because of
huge
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the huge
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 amount of money needed to complete the
cours
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course
.
As a result
 of
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the lake
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lake
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lack
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 of money many students
leaver
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 their dreams. To
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tackle
take
 with situations,
government
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the government
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 is providing some
amout
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amount
 of fees as
scholarship
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scholarships
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 and funding so people can complete their
course
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courses
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 and become independent. To conclude, it is not true that university
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education
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eduction
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education
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 only
advantages
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has advantages
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to
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for
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the student
a student
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students
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student
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students
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, as after studying they help
comman
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common
command
 public by working in different sectors
such
 as health
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care
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case
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care
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 which is
also
helpfull
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helpful
 to
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the whole
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whole
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the whole
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 society.
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