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In some counties, it is now possible for people to buy products made in other counties. To what extent do the benefits of this development outweigh the problems?

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Nowadays, globalization caused people to buy more goods from peer
countries
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, while
purchase
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 fewer products from their own
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country
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countries
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. With that in mind, buying commodities from other
countries
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 results in both positive and negative effects,
reseachers
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researchers
 argue whether the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
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 analysis opines that the positive benefits of importing goods surpass the negative repercussions due to the cheaper cost
production
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 and regional uncommon commodity. Importing helps reduce
manufacture
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cost
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 which results in higher efficiency of
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country's
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the country's
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 economical strategies. Every
country
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 has a substantial minimum wage gap, from 0.5 USD per day up to 50 USD.
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 provides a cheaper production cost by purchasing from low minimum wage
countries
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, while
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 a chance to sell at
much
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 higher rate and profit at the same time.
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, Starbucks bought coffee beans from Thailand
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 of buying from U.S. farmers. Some
countries
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 don't have a certain commodity in their own sites so they need to import from other
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. In fact,
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 type of
importing
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 is essential to every single
country
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 around the world because none of the
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country
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 has all the resources. The most common example is oil, despite the fact that
United
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the United
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 Kingdom is
sonorous
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 individual, they still have to buy gasoline imperatively from Russia and Dubai because crude oil doesn't exist in their area. In conclusion, purchasing goods from other
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is
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 more beneficial than drawbacks because of
cost-effective
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cost-effectiveness
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 and lack of regional resources. Reality is multifaceted, it is best to
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 consider the negative effects and make
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a change
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change
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of
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 the law if
neccessary
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necessary
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