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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In modern society, public
transport
 is one of the most beneficial features for residents in the cities that become to the argument between local
people
 to consider whether the government should spend the huge funds in the construction of new railways line for express trains to
transport
 from city to city or developing other existing public
transport
such
 as trams and buses. Both views will be elaborated and I will give my personal idea in
this
 essay. According to the idea of improving railways system,
firstly
, many
people
 consider that it will be the advantages for agriculture and farming in order to import and export their fresh products in the possible shortest time. The best example I would depict is Japan which is a famous country in railway structure, there have more than 10,000 railway lines.
Therefore
, there study and construct more lines to support local farmers to transfer their products,
people
 in Hokkaido which is the northern of Japan are able to consume fresh tomatoes from Kyushu which is in the south after picking from the trees only 5 hours by bullet train 'Shinkansen'.
Moreover
, the traffic congestion on the road is another concern as the higher growth of
people
 in the city each year,
consequently
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 own their vehicle to use in their everyday's life.
On the other hand
, some
people
 oppose
this
 idea, they are of the opinion that existing public
transport
 must be the
first
 priority to use the public funds. The cost might spend to improve in order to save money and tackle other serious issues for the countries
such
 as economic, education or health.
Furthermore
, it is deniable that we do not need to promote and give new information about the new way of transporting which unexisted yet.
Hence
, many
people
 who ever experience with existing public
transport
 or the special group
such
 as the elderly, children will not find the difficulty. In conclusion, it seems to me that the plan to develop a railway system with rapid trains will be beneficial for the majority of
people
 in the countries much more than only improving the existing public
transport
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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