Earlier technological developments brought more benefits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent developments ever will. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that technological advancement has brought a revolution in common people's lives from the ancient era. The major chunk of development has already been invented and nowadays

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more about making it more efficient for the masses. Though I agree that ,

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technology has provided humongous benefits in the form of communication, transportation, healthcare, electricity, infrastructure and many more to the civilization but ,personally I believe that it will keep on involving and will provide more and more benefits. The

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major breakthrough occurred with the invention of electricity, earlier people only used to work during the daytime but with the invention of

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the whole dynamic changed. The other one was the invention of the telephone by Graham Bell which is now considered the best source of communication.

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, the innovation of engines has helped transport goods and services in an efficient manner as compared to using carts. These technological developments have not only provided better living standards but

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proved to be cost and time-efficient.

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, with rapid technological developments, these innovations are

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upgraded and provided much more benefits to ordinary people.

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, nowadays

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of bulbs everyone is using LED as it is more effective, durable and environmental friendly as well.

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, earlier we used to have wired telephones for conversation but now everyone is using Smartphones, which not only serves the purpose of communication but

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helps in day to day activities, like tracking your movements, checking the news online, etc.

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, the modification of engines in vehicles to use electricity

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of using natural resources, and the automatic vehicles with more safety control mechanism as compared to traditional cars has provided extreme comfort to travellers. At

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, I would say that technology has changed the lifestyle of humans from the historical era and has always been fruitful to humankind with continuous developments.

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Earlier technological developments brought more benefits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent developments ever will. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.