You have just returned home from a holiday and have received photographs from a friend who was on holiday with you. Write to your frind thanking them for the photographs. You should include: -a description of the photos -the most memorable thing about the holiday -invite them to come and stay with you

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Dear Mohammed, I'm just writing to let you know that I've received the pictures from my vacation in Dubai, UAE. I really love the scenes at the Burj Khalifa, the most iconic tower in Dubai. I never thought that I'd dare to climb up to the 60th floor and went out to the helipad to snap them. The day was so fine so my bright dress went

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remember how epic the lunch we had at the Masakin restaurant was. It was an extremely fine-dining experience for me where I could see the city scenery from the restaurant because it has glass walls surrounding the place. In exchange, I'd like to invite you to come to Bali, Indonesia

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summer holiday. You don't have to book any accommodations as we can stay at my villa in Uluwatu. I'll take you around the island to see paddy fields, mountains and white beaches. All the best, Sur

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

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162 words

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